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The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.

The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.
#visitor #visitors #zealand #countries #years
The line graph illustrates the yearly visitors spend for tourists to New Zealand from Australia,
USA
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the USA
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,
UK
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the UK
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, Japan and China between 1996 to 2014. The data is calibrated in NZ dollars.
It is clear that
 money
spend
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spent
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 in New Zealand by tourists from
all
Correct determiner usage
apply
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various countries increased from 1996 to 2014,
Although
 there were some fluctuations along the way.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual expenditure
  • tourism revenue
  • spending trends
  • economic impact
  • visitor spend
  • tourism sector
  • peak spending
  • fluctuations
  • incline/decline in spending
  • monetary contribution
  • tourist demographics
  • economic conditions
  • tourism campaigns
  • statistical analysis
  • data interpretation
  • fiscal year
  • extrapolate data
  • spending patterns
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