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Some University students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Students
 around the world have various ideas about learning
materials
 in universities. It is argued by some
students
 that they want to learn other
materials
 alongside their major
materials
.
However
, other
students
 believe that it is important for us to concentrate on our lessons. There are some rational arguments on both sides of
this
 contentious topic which will be discussed in detail.
Nevertheless
, I firmly believe that one-track-minded
students
 might not be a successful person in their lives. On the one hand, many
students
 opine that they should concentrate on their main
subjects
 and
materials
 as through
this
 they can be professional and expert in their fields.
That is
 to say,
students
 in the mathematics field believe that it is unnecessary to study history or art in university and that they need to learn more and focus better on math
materials
. It is claimed by these
students
 that studying other
subjects
 is time-consuming and we do not need them in our future careers. Undoubtedly, focusing on just your
subjects
 is the key tenet to becoming successful.
On the other hand
, other
students
 believe that when we focus on just one major, we can not get familiar with other sciences or fields. Indeed, knowing other
materials
 helps
students
 to broaden their horizons. To illustrate the point,
students
 in the art field should learn
materials
 in history and anthropology so as to get acquainted with people from all walks of life and be tolerant of cultural differences. Thanks to the technology and internet,
students
 can easily communicate with other
students
 and scholars and exchange their ideas on the grounds that almost all majors are interdisciplinary and related to each other in today’s world.
To conclude
, there are valid arguments on both sides of the controversy, on balance,
however
, it is my firm conviction that
students
 should be multidimensional and study other
materials
 and
subjects
along with
 their main major.
In other words
, those who become successful have diverse knowledge, not just in-depth knowledge in their major, and a one-track mind.
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