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Some people think that it is better to choose friends who always have same opinions as them, other people believe it’s good to have friend who disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Having a strong relationship with some
people
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 that they are not in their family is the best way to spend life,
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however
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 sometimes many of the
friends
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 have different personalities so
others
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 are in the same position as each other. I agree with
people
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 who prefer to be in touch with equal perspectives because there are more times and more favourite recreational activities.
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, there is a variety of communication among
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 but the most important is about choosing
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. Some believe that
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 must have different views from each other, so they can improve their lives when they stand in bad situations.
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, when an introverted person faces social problems and needs to argue with
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, they can not and prefer to keep silent, but extroverted personality
friends
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 help them either with encouragement or with a reaction
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 of one.
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,
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 all the time, look at the whole world with their ideas and do have not any sight of
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 around,
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 have more stressful experiences with the community's attitude and their characteristics so someone does not behave honestly and maybe want to injure
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,
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, kind and fulfil emotional person need to have a friend with the logical brain that can save them against the unlike environment.
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, some believe that
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 with the same ideas are really better because on every occasion they are similar to each other and have a better understanding of their mind, and
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, they have common leisure time, more common issues to speaking and other activity so they can spend more hour with each other. When
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 with the same opinion live close, static shows that their relationship increases and continues their end of life, in fact, it is so effective on their emotions and rate of life expectancy. So because of having a permanent duration friendship I personally prefer to choose
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 with the same ideas.
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,
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 having different personality
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 cause be aware of the world, not only does spending more time together but
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 having more similar activity is the best reason to choose
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 with the same point of view.
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, on balance, I believe that similar main brain
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 cause one to have long-term relationships.
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