In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can the arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot? Give the reason?

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In the globalization era, the advent of technology and scientific

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us many higher quality of life.

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, some debates think that there are a large group of

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who admire

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I personally believe that

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able to cope with the problems in our daily life. There are many reasons why artists like musicians, painters and writers remain still at large even in

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tech-savvy world.

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, masterpieces of

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have an enormous influence on

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’s interests. The reason is that not only does the artworks inspire human with emotional effects after admiring them, but they

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can heal the heart of depressed

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, there are many pictures

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as The Starry Night, and Sunflowers by the well-known artist Van Gogh, which circulate these days and bring plenty of inspiration for younger generations about the stories of the

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. At the same time, making

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would help

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who have

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manage their

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and it

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helps them to express themselves without having to use words.

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, the museum always has the action to protect the

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in order to pass it on to future descendants.

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people

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can find pleasure in a good work of

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Art

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assists individuals in connecting with others who love

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like them and expanding their world to

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around them through music or painting. The reason is that in our age, there are quantities of individuals who have to face isolation and cannot connect with

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society.

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, through drawing or writing in

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people

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could rebuild their relationships and get in touch with

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around which

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everyone to increase

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social interaction. In conclusion,

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invented plenty of machines to

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take

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in our daily

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, not all of them can provide

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smart

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in terms of human emotional problems. After all,

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may be the key

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people on

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emotional health which can provide

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creativity

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, motivation and inspiration.

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The essay addresses the topic, but it lacks depth and clear organization. The main points are not clearly developed, and the examples provided need more elaboration to support the arguments effectively.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are present, but they lack clarity and coherence. The essay lacks clear logical progression and fails to effectively link ideas within and between paragraphs.

Your opinion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

334 words

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In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can the arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot? Give the reason?

Your opinion

With the increase in computer use, many people feel that school do not need to put the emphasis that they used to on basic handwriting skills or mathematics skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In modern life, it is no longer necessary to use animals as food and in other products like clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some regard it is important to keep and maintain old buildings rather than replacing them with modern buildings? To what extent do you agree or disagree, express your opinion?

Some people believe that the communication between family members is lesser today compared to the past. Do you agree or disgaree?