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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

#people #school #children #homework #teachers #role #education
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People
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 have different views about whether or not teachers should assign
homework
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 to
children
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 some
people
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 hold the opinion against the mandatory
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homework
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, I personally believe that it is
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 aspect of
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. On the one hand, there are several reasons why
people
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 think
homework
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 is an unessential burden on
children
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. The main cause is that it is important to allow
children
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 to watch their
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english
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 TV shows or engage in outdoor activities with their friends. As they can improve their
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 skills and reduce stress after a hectic day at school. Another reason is that parents, these days,
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all agree that the school day
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 already long enough and their offsprings are too
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exhausted to do
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further
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 study when they return home.
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,
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 need to
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 the pressure and recharge their batteries before going to school
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the next day.
On the other hand
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, I opine that assignments play a crucial part in the schooling of
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, it helps encourage independent learning and
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 through doing
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 alone.
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,
they
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children
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also
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 apply
their
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 knowledge that they had
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 in class.
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, when
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 have many maths exercises at home, students can consolidate their understanding
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theory
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the theory
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 that teachers have just taught.
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,
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 could have an opportunity to equip independent study
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, one one the most vital skills which could help them
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much in their career paths in the future. In conclusion,
while
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 some
people
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 think that
homework
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 brings loads of drawbacks for their
children
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, I am convinced that the benefits outweigh them in the long term.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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