In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant information from your own knowledge experience.

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In spite of staying in one community throughout life people in today's world love to migrate from one community to another
due to
their personal work,to get the facilities as wanted and many others etcetera.
However
,there are both pros and cons when deciding to do
this
type of work.
This
essay will discuss both the advantages along disadvantages of
this
notion in the forthcoming paragraph.
Firstly
,the main advantage regarding
this
topic is that there is no discrimination in languages,castes and
as well as
in religions.
While
a person travels from one area to another area there will be possibly different languages, castes and religions.
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task response
The essay does not fully address the advantages and disadvantages of people moving around, and the response lacks clear and comprehensive ideas. Provide specific examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is somewhat unclear, and there is a need for better organization and coherence between paragraphs and ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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