The chart below shows the changes in gross domestic product (GDP) in the Western Cape between 2000 and 2010.

The chart below shows the changes in gross domestic product (GDP) in the Western Cape between 2000 and 2010.
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The diagram illustrates the evolution of the average growth of domestic products among all European countries over a span of 10
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. Clearly, the data experiences fluctuations in
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period, characterized by an alternating trend in the first 4
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, a relatively stable rise in the following 3
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, and dramatic changes in the
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3-year period. To be more specific, the data starts from 4.1% in 2000, after several
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of evolution, and stops at 5.5% in 2004. From 2004 to 2007, the general GDP has steadily grown by 0.7, fixed at 6.2%.
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, from 2007 to 2009, the data point significantly
drops
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7.7 and
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the lowest level during
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duration (-1.5%), followed by a subsequent surge, and eventually stabled at 2.5%.
To sum up
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, the
overall
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pattern of the Western average GDP has witnessed notable changes throughout the first decade of the 21st century, particularly in the
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three
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. The growth point in 2010 is lower than that at the beginning of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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