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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to a work place every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some
people
 agree that remote
work
 from home is more efficient for most employees rather than spending
this
time
 getting to
work
. Others hold the opposite point of view. Undoubtedly, there are both pros and cons regarding
this
 situation, which I will speak about in
this
 essay. Talking about advantages, saving travelling-to-
work
time
 can be beneficial for an employer as for an employee. First of all, saved road
time
 can be converted into productive
work
time
. Many
people
 spend many sufficient hours driving to their workplace and back daily. At the same
time
, they could use
this
time
 to finish their
work
 earlier, and in some cases even faster, which might help to increase the
work
 total output.
Secondly
, stress is one of the most common mental health issues nowadays, which affects the workflow and employees' productivity. Dozens of studies show that some
people
 tend to feel more relaxed and calm in comfortable surroundings,
while
 a long way to
work
 and the workplace often stressful atmosphere may raise the level of anxiety.
Nonetheless
, remote
work
 can cause negative working results as well.
For instance
, it is more difficult for some
people
 to concentrate on
work
 being at home, as there
is
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 a bunch of distractions that can catch their attention.
This
 may lead to a productivity fall and cause some financial losses for the employer.
Moreover
, some research,
on the contrary
, proves that workplace atmosphere increases
work
 efficiency. Seeing other's hard
work
 and input creates a pleasant working environment for some
people
 because they may feel the importance of their
job
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. In conclusion, from my point of view, the advantages of remote
work
 overweight the disadvantages by giving employees more space and opportunities for efficient
time
 usage and personal realisation.
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task response
Ensure that the essay fully addresses the prompt, considering both the advantages and disadvantages of remote work. Provide a balanced argument by acknowledging both viewpoints and making a clear, well-supported conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented and effectively summarize the main points of the essay. Maintain this level of clarity and coherence throughout the body of the essay, using appropriate linking words and transitions to guide the reader through the argument.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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