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Some people claim that not enough of the waste form home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is government to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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Somebody told me that if legal regulations about recycling are made, the number of people who participate in recycling will increase. I totally agree with that view,
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 I think legal control is essential in our society.
This
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 essay will highlight why governments legislate for recycling.
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 with the positives, environmental legislation can lead to families' participation in recycling more than before. These laws will have some changes, which
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people who did not reuse resources would participate in recycling.
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, the raw can induce more accurate recycling methods. I am sure that accurate recycling will make more resources available again. I
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 often did not recycle because I was busy with my work. Because annoying, I sometimes did not do it. Through my past experiences, The law on recycling is absolutely necessary. Plus, If people have to pay a fine, they might do to recycle better. Another reason, it can make participation of enterprises. Some companies did not make any effort to recycle. Recycling often
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 been cost not a little money. They have given up reusing resources for their profits. It will incur social problems eventually. I have experience reading news like that. I think that to cut
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 wrong cycle, the regulation which has strong power is no longer a choice. In conclusion, we should not anymore rely on individual consciences. With the participation of more houses and companies, we do not have any doubt about government legislation about recycling.
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