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Many feel that going to gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#gym #methods
At
this
 time, staying fit is an important thing
with
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for
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 everyone,
accordingly
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according
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 to the figure of the government , the number of
people
go
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who go
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 to the
gym
increase
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increases
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 sharply,
whereas
 others choose other
methods
.
This
 essay argues with more effective
methods
.
Firstly
, more
people
 choose to stay fit by more
methods
 like yoga, pilates, exercise and so on. To be honest, that brings more benefits to
people
,
people
 do not need to spend more time with that, like gymnastics ,
people
 have to go every day to get high
result
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results
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, but with others,
people
 just need about a second or third a week. With
gym
,
it
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apply
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is
also
 a great idea,
people
 can go every day
with
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at
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 a lower cost,
instead
 of spending more money for pilates,
yoga
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and yoga
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 .In that, you can meet and make more friends, some
people
also
 find
lover
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lovers
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, some funny things. More
people
also
 see that as a place to relax after working or studying.
Besides
, all things bring a positive and negative side, the
gym
 brings more positive for
people
 like children difficult to improve high, it's so hard to stop going to the
gym
 and so on. That’s a reason why
people
 choose other
methods
,
instead
 of the
gym
This
gym
 or other
methods
 is
also
 great, by
people
 should choose the best way to make effect to work or study
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  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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