Many feel that going to gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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time, staying fit is an important thing

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everyone,

accordingly

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to the figure of the government , the number of

people

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who go

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to the

gym

increase

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sharply,

whereas

others choose other

methods

This

essay argues with more effective

methods

Firstly

, more

people

choose to stay fit by more

methods

like yoga, pilates, exercise and so on. To be honest, that brings more benefits to

people

do not need to spend more time with that, like gymnastics ,

people

have to go every day to get high

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, but with others,

people

just need about a second or third a week. With

gym

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also

a great idea,

people

can go every day

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a lower cost,

instead

of spending more money for pilates,

yoga

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.In that, you can meet and make more friends, some

people

also

find

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, some funny things. More

people

also

see that as a place to relax after working or studying.

Besides

, all things bring a positive and negative side, the

gym

brings more positive for

people

like children difficult to improve high, it's so hard to stop going to the

gym

and so on. That’s a reason why

people

choose other

methods

instead

of the

gym

This

gym

or other

methods

also

great, by

people

should choose the best way to make effect to work or study

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Physical well-being
prime option
structured exercise routines
professional equipment
fostering an environment
motivation and discipline
counter-argument
outdoor activities
home workouts
cost-effectiveness
social and emotional satisfaction
team sports
hybrid approach
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