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The graph bellow shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2010.

The graph bellow shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2010.
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The display graph shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2010. The MET, New York, in the
year
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 2000 it was 12, in the
year
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 2001 it was 6, in the
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 2002 it was 6, in the
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 2003 it was 7, in the
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 2004 it was 12 and in the
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 2005 it was 14. In Edo-Tokyo, in the
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 2000
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 ,2001 it was the highest with more than 12. In the
year
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 2002 it was 9, in the
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 2003 it was 6, in the
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 2004 it was 8 and in the
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 2005 it was 10. In the National, China, in the
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 ,2000 it was 6, in the
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 2001 it was nearly 8, in the
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 2002 it was 11, in the
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 2003 and
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 in the
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 2004 it was 11 but in 2005 it was 16.
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, the data is in annual visitors in millions.
To conclude
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, the above information shows the number of visitors to three museums they are MET, New York, Edo-Tokyo and National, China.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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