The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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This
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bar graph illustrates, for the three different types of metal, the average monthly
price
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fluctuations in 2014.
Overall
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, the
price
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of copper and nickel decreased throughout the whole time frame,
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that of zinc increased.   Focusing on the
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of copper and nickel, they started with 2% and 6% changes in
price
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in comparison with the previous
month
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, respectively. The percentage of nickel experienced a significant drop by June, recording the lowest percentage at -3%. After that point, its
price
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fluctuated and recovered
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1%
at the end
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of the
month
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.
On the other hand
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, the
price
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of copper decreased slightly by May to -0.5% and rose gradually over the next seven months, reaching under 2%.   Turning to the
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of zinc, its percentage was at 1% in the first
month
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.
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it showed a surge of 3% the next
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, it experienced a downward trend until June, recording a -1%. Over the next six months, though its
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fluctuation was steady until October, it depicted a significant upward trend of 2% by December.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, month with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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