The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
This
bar graph illustrates, for the three different types of metal, the average monthly
price
fluctuations in 2014.
Overall
, the
price
of copper and nickel decreased throughout the whole time frame,
while
that of zinc increased.   Focusing on the
price
of copper and nickel, they started with 2% and 6% changes in
price
in comparison with the previous
month
, respectively. The percentage of nickel experienced a significant drop by June, recording the lowest percentage at -3%. After that point, its
price
fluctuated and recovered
at
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1%
at the end
of the
month
.
On the other hand
, the
price
of copper decreased slightly by May to -0.5% and rose gradually over the next seven months, reaching under 2%.   Turning to the
price
of zinc, its percentage was at 1% in the first
month
.
Although
it showed a surge of 3% the next
month
, it experienced a downward trend until June, recording a -1%. Over the next six months, though its
price
fluctuation was steady until October, it depicted a significant upward trend of 2% by December.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, month with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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