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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The linear graph exemplifies the comparison of international Tourist Arrivals in five countries (
Brazil
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,
Egypt
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, Malaysia, France, and the
USA
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) from the
year
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 1995 to 2010 at intervals of 5 years. The data is calibrated in millions.
Overall
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, the
USA
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 had the highest sum of foreign arrivals all over the years,
while
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Brazil
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 and
Egypt
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 are slightly the same and the lowest among all the countries.
Additionally
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, all the countries (
Brazil
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,
Egypt
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, Malaysia, France) increase with time
whereas
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 the
USA
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 decrease by the period.
Firstly
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, the number of travellers in
Egypt
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 and Malaysia slowly escalated to approximately 15 and 35
million
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 respectively by the
year
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 2005 and
finally
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 rapidly grew to roughly 25 and 45
million
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 correspondingly in 2010.
Similarly
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,
Brazil
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 showed a slow growth (at the rate of 0.1
million
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) in foreign arrivals until 2000 Eventually, the growth continued after 2000 until 2010 reaching the closest sum of tourists to almost greater than 10
million
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.
Also
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, France had a considerably large number of international tourists from the
year
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 1995 to 2005 with a difference of about 40
million
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 and
further
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 grows around 90
million
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.
Lastly
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, the number of people visiting internationally in the
USA
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 rose significantly by 30
million
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 roughly and
thereafter
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 showed a slight decrease by the
year
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 2010.
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