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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
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The maps show various changes in the university’s
sports
 centre by comparing the current plan and redevelopment plans for the future.
Overall
 it can be seen that the center will become completely roofed over and increase in size with more facilities being added.
To begin
 with, the present outdoor courts on the west side will be replaced with a leisure swimming pool which will have direct access to a new dressing room on the extreme south-west corner of the structure.
Additionally
, the lobby will be enlarged, and a brand-new
sports
 shop will be established close to the changing area. The main 25-meter will stay just as it is. The reception, changing area, and sitting layout surrounding the pool will
also
 not alter. Moving to the outdoor courts on the east of the centre will be eliminated to create
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room for new facilities. In the extreme southeast, there’s a plan to create a new changing room that
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 to a brand-new café which is opposite the new
sports
 hall.
Moreover
, two dance studios will be constructed close to the
sports
 hall, one of them will be next to the recently expanded gym.
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