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New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages of this overwigh disadvantages?

#technologies #children #time #overwigh
Nowadays, the way
of
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children
pass
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 their free
time
undergoes
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 numerous changes.
Although
 there are some benefits
due to
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the use
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using
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technologies
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of technologies
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 and the internet in
the
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 free
time
, I think that
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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overweigh
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 the advantages. It has been stated that there are significant benefits in order to
using
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 technologies in
the
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 free
time
. These days,
children
 play some computer and video games in their pass
time
. In order to play them, they are going to learn how to improve their identical abilities. Some online games
such
 as Fifa and Clash-of-Clans contribute
children
 to not only
improve
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the
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 sense of imagination
,
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 but
also
the
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 sense of
compettition
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competition
.
Additionally
, some video applications like
Youtube
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YouTube
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 can
assisst
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assist
student
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students
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to search
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in searching
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whatever
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for whatever
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 they want to see
such
 as
academical
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 lessons or cartoons.
However
, these kinds of
application
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applications
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 can spread
violent
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 among
children
 because all of their contents are
nit
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not
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appropriate
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fot
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for
children
 and teenagers.
On the other hand
, I think that the
disanvantages
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disadvantages
 of using technology in offspring's pass
time
 can be harmful
for
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to
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 both their mental and physical conditions.
For instance
,
due to
 playing video games, the
interests
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interest
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of
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in
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 outdoor activities
have been
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has
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 decreased. Having a sedentary lifestyle without enough physical activities has
lead
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children
 to
overweight
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 and
un-balanced
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unbalanced
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 body structure.
Furthermore
, using mobile phones and
electronical
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electronic
 gadgets in schools's free
time
 would lead students to
the
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 lack of communication with their peers.
As a result
, the level of self-confidence among them would be declined. In conclusion, there are some advantages for
children
 who
fullfil
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fulfil
 their free
time
 with technological-based devices.
However
,in my
opinion
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,opinion
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 the disadvantages
such
 as
lack
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a lack
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 of communication skills and
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle
overweigh
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outweigh
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 the benefits.
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