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The plans show the change of a small theater in 2010 and 2012.

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 maps illustrate the degree to which a small theatre changed from 2010 to 2012.
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 became noticeably larger with the expansion of its upper and lower sections, and all of its facilities were either repurposed or relocated, except for the auditorium and the stage. Regarding the top of the plan, the stage was enlarged in a northerly direction, overtaking half of the space previously occupied by the dressing room in 2010, which was turned into a corridor
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 years later. Meanwhile, there used to be a storage space flanking the stage and the corridor on the left in 2010, but it was
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 right flank in order to make way for
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 new rooms where performers or actors could get changed and take a shower. Turning to the remaining areas of the
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 the auditorium in the middle remained intact, the foyer below it had been extended towards the left by 2012, allowing for the establishment of a restaurant at the expense of the administration and ticket offices on the left-hand side of the main entrance.
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 in turn led to the relocation of the former to the left side of the auditorium and the latter to the bottom right corner of the plan, replacing the cafe that was present in 2010.
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