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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the Advantages and Disadvantages of this approach.

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Nowadays, Genetically modified
crops
demend
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demand
 increased in the market to boost the production of food
grains
 and
fullfil
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fulfil
 the needs of rapidly growing populations in
devloping
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developing
nation
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. It is most
benefits increasing
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production
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the production
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 of
grains
 with limited resources and
increased
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increase
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 potential health risks. In
this
 essay, I will explain both of the advantages and
disadvanatages
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disadvantages
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example
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examples
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.
To begin
 with, we have
discuss
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 positive
point
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points
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. It is
using
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 for higher production with limited resources because it
is required
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requires
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 less water,
less
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and less
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 land, and
developed
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 in any weather conditions. These
crops
 easily prevent
from
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grains
insects
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and insects
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 and
also
less
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fewer
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needs
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need
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of
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for
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 pesticides.
For example
, many former are using these
crops
 for generating
the
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a
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 good amount of money and
fullfil
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fulfilling
 the
requirement
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requirements
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 of the nations.
Such
 as, they have required less time
for growing
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to grow
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 than normal food
grains
 and reduced the
envirnmental
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environmental
 impact
from
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of
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 pest control.
On the other hand
, every
postive
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positive
things
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have
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has
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 some drawbacks.
It is
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major
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a major
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 issue with these
crops
are
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is
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 creating
the
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potential health risks, because these
gentic
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genetic
 modified
using
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use
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 the chemical not
natrual
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natural
.
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,
form
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from
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 the
last
 two decades,
heartatacks
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heart attacks
 and cancer patients
raipdly
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rapidly
 increased rather
than
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to
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 the past. So,
also
impact
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impacts
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on
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apply
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the food chains and
also
 soil
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to loose
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loose
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their
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its
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 fertility after
sometimes
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some time
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. In conclusion, Gentic modified grain
provide
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provides
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the
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apply
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more
prroduction
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production
 with limited
resoureces
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resources
 and it is important to
fullfilled
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fulfil
fulfilled
 the needs of
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the worlds
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worlds
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world
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 populations, but parralley
provide
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provides
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 the major illness. If we have look over all the major advantages than the disadvantages.
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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Address all parts of the task. Ensure you are fully answering the question and discussing both advantages and disadvantages equally.
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