The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.

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The bar graph illustrates the duration of hours every teacher spent teaching in various schools (Primary, Secondary and Upper Secondary) in four countries (Japan, Spain, Iceland and
USA
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the USA

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).
Overall
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, what stands out from the data is that in all countries, upper secondary has
greatest
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the greatest

It appears that the phrase greatest duration does not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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duration of time spent learning compared to the other levels,
while
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primary is the shortest. In more detail, upper secondary in the USA accounts for the longest hour spent teaching at under 1200H ,respectively
in contrast
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Japan has the shortest hour at over 600H.
On the other hand
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, Spain and Iceland hovered around 900H.
Moreover
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, in lower secondary the USA still has the longest time at over 900H
while
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the rest of the nation spent their hours teaching at around 600H.
Additionally
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, in primary
the
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apply

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Iceland surprisingly has the shortest figure for both at under 600H
whereas
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the other nations
provides
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provide

The singular verb provides does not appear to agree with the plural subject nations. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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at least over 600H for the 2 levels.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words h with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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