The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.
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The bar graph illustrates the duration of hours every teacher spent teaching in various schools (Primary, Secondary and Upper Secondary) in four countries (Japan, Spain, Iceland and
USA
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the USA
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).
Overall
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, what stands out from the data is that in all countries, upper secondary has
greatest
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the greatest
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duration of time spent learning compared to the other levels,
while
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primary is the shortest. In more detail, upper secondary in the USA accounts for the longest hour spent teaching at under 1200H ,respectively
in contrast
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Japan has the shortest hour at over 600H.
On the other hand
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, Spain and Iceland hovered around 900H.
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, in lower secondary the USA still has the longest time at over 900H
while
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the rest of the nation spent their hours teaching at around 600H.
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, in primary
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Iceland surprisingly has the shortest figure for both at under 600H
whereas
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the other nations
provides
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at least over 600H for the 2 levels.
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