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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

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The given two maps show plans of Grange
Park
 when it first opened in 1920 and now.
Overall
, there are a lot of changes in today's Grange
Park
. It is now much more modern. To go into details, there was a fountain in the middle of the
park
then
 it was replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats. On the left side of the
fountain
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 there was a stage for musicians and it changed to an amphitheatre for concerts. On the top of the
park
 on the right , a corner there is a children's play area which was a pond for water plants in 1920.
In addition
, the glasshouse turned into a water feature and there is a entrance underground car
park
 which was not available at that time. There were three rose gardens one of them which was on the top of the left corner is stayed, on the opposite side of
this
 there was another rose garden which is a cafe now and the
last
 one is completely lost.
Moreover
, seats except around the rose garden in the middle of the
park
 don't have in today's Grange
Park
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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