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In modern world technology develops dramatically. Some people believe that this is good for traditional cultures, but others think it will lead to their extinction. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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's significant
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, some individuals believe that the
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 can contribute to traditional
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 becoming better.
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, other individuals’ stance
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this
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 could contribute to
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culture
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 trapping into extinction
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. I opine critically on the impact of traditional
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 with
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development
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, which is technological
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 indispensably being more advanced techniques to protect the traditional
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 effectively, but some traditional cultures might be precluded because
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development
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 brings
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 positive effects and makes our living conditions
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, technologies can possess traditional cultures more effectively.
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, articles, and books could be effectively stored in the system, making us search for traditional arts and works quickly.
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, some flawed traditional arts and works could be fixed and assisted by certain types of advances and technologies
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 as artificial intelligence.
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 as Bing and ChatGPT can bring some potential and anticipated answers and suggestions.
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, if historians could obtain the anticipated answers from these advanced technologies, the process of recovering the works could be more accurate and sufficient. Everything has its characteristics in positive and negative perspectives. Some people are concerned that the
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 of
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 could make some traditional cultures extinction traps. The dominant example is that when I was a junior high school student, reciting some
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 and ancient publications was a mandatory responsibility for me. Even some quizzes and examinations required me to write the
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 which we had recited. With the
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development
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, we can easily search the
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 and ancient articles from websites or artificial intelligence.
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 cultural heritage may be at risk. To summarise,
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 brings indispensable positive effects
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 as protecting and storing the
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 effectively and
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bringing
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 some inevitable drawbacks.
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, we are
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 to view the
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 effects critically and take more consideration.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital archives
  • Global audience
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Documentation of languages
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Mass media
  • Cultural expressions
  • Digital divide
  • Underrepresented cultures
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