The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
The bar graph illustrates the changes in the
number
of people
born inside and outside of Australia living in urban, rural and towns in 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, what stands out from the data is that the majority of people
are from the cities
in both Australia and outside of the country while
the people
born in rural areas account for the lowest number
.
In more detail, in 1995 the number
of people
from the cities
that came outside the nation had the highest value at exactly 60% compared to the citizens born in Australian cities
at over 40%. Moreover
, those who are from the countryside outside the country have the lowest figure at just under 20% in contrast
those who are from town inside is
at 20%
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On the other hand
, in 2010 citizens from the cities
still had the majority number
of the population for both areas inside and outside (at 80% and just over 60%, respectively). Unexpectedly, the number
of people
from the town and rural areas in both places only reached a small percentage at under 20%.Submitted by Anneya
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