The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
The bar graph illustrates the changes in the
number
of
people
born inside and outside of Australia living in urban, rural and towns in 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, what stands out from the data is that the majority of
people
are from the
cities
in both Australia and outside of the country
while
the
people
born in rural areas account for the lowest
number
. In more detail, in 1995 the
number
of
people
from the
cities
that came outside the nation had the highest value at exactly 60% compared to the citizens born in Australian
cities
at over 40%.
Moreover
, those who are from the countryside outside the country have the lowest figure at just under 20%
in contrast
those who are from town inside
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at 20%
On the other hand
, in 2010 citizens from the
cities
still had the majority
number
of the population for both areas inside and outside (at 80% and just over 60%, respectively). Unexpectedly, the
number
of
people
from the town and rural areas in both places only reached a small percentage at under 20%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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