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Essay Question: Some people think that to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately-owned vehicles should be banned in city centres, while others consider this to be an unrealistic solution. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some individuals believe that in order to fix the issue of heavy traffic jams in cities, private cars must be restricted.
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, other
people
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 opine that
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 is impossible.
This
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 essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter.
To begin
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 with, congestion has become an immense problem in the past decades because the population in urban areas is significantly increasing and infrastructure is not well
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, certain individuals suggest banning privately owned vehicles in city centres as they cause those blockages. With
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 prohibition,
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 will use more private transport
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 as buses, trains, metro
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, the rate of pollution and noise from automobiles will rapidly diminish, which will affect humanity's health.
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, the vast majority of
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 will not agree with
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 prohibition because it is not rational and it creates a lot of barriers for
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 with disabilities, families with kids, pensioners
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. Undoubtedly, having a private vehicle offers enormous comfort and opportunities
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 it is more relaxing than public transport.
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, there are a number of other policies that can be taken to tackle
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 problem
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 as paid roads.
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, a few huge cities like Almaty and Moscow added these roads a few years ago
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 it decreased traffic jams a little.
To sum up
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, automobiles create a vast amount of congestion
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however
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, I strongly believe that banning them in city centres is not the right solution. There should not be that kind of prohibition in modern democratic countries.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
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Use linking words to connect your ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
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Provide more specific examples to support your arguments.
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The essay discusses both sides of the argument well.
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The introduction provides a clear overview of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • ban
  • vehicles
  • city centres
  • unrealistic
  • transportation
  • public transport
  • air quality
  • fewer
  • travel
  • encourage
  • rely on
  • remove
  • difficult
  • option
  • transport
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