Some people think TV is a good for us , while others argue that television has many disadvantage. Discuss both views.

With the advancement of technology, there are several ways to consume entertainment, like
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of social media, surfing online and most
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television
, which is the oldest form
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fun. But recently
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television
has become a point of debate
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the consumption of
television
is good or bad.
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essay will discuss both views and my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with the first notion, there are murals of things to be shared.
Firstly
, despite
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the increase of social media over different platforms,
television
is still the most preferable way to have pleasure because it relaxes the mind of an individual.
For example
, a survey of the Times of India
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that around 80% of
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choose to watch
TV
rather than the other way of amusement.
Moreover
, people can watch
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and learn about what is going on in the country and
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the younger audience,
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can do daily shopping by watching the
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on the screen.
As a result
,
television
can be helpful in
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part of our lives.
On the other hand
, in today's time, most
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the
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young toddlers are just attached to the
TV
and
thus
it can have various side-effects like
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eyesight and many more .
For instance
, I want 35% of children
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spectacles at an early stage of
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lives.
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to
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, children can become very lazy and furious because they are not comfortable doing their job on time.
As a result
, children just waste
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time
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watching
TV
which even
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an adverse effect on
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body.
Further
, they do not learn any value by watching it.
To conclude
, there are numerous drawbacks of watching
TV
, but I strongly believe that, by watching
television
, a person can be led from their busy schedule and can have fun.
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