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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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In my opinion, the subject of damaging the environment needs to be placed at the top of the
government
 agenda since they have the power to remedy the situation. I am
also
 convinced that much of the responsibility of protecting the environment should be taken by individuals. In
this
 essay, I will explore the answers to these questions. It is my view that, from an energy sources standpoint, humans have been burning fossil fuels on a large scale since the Industrial Revolution and since
this
 process releases a sizeable amount of CO2 into the atmosphere, a viable option for the
government
 to resolve these issues can be exploring an alternative source of energy.
In other words
, introducing renewable energies that significantly
contributes
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 to the reduction of carbon dioxide and its threatening effects on the ecosystem.
In addition
, from a legal viewpoint, the
government
 can be stricter about environmental law violations.
For example
, they can put pressure on manufacturers that produce non-biodegradable packaging or be tougher on factories that discharge their toxic waste into the rivers. I
further
 believe that, on an individual level,
people
 can make sure their way of living is as sustainable as possible since changing our lifestyle would have a widespread impact on the environment.
Firstly
,
people
 should reduce their household waste by changing their consumption habits. To clarify, buying less, choosing what we really need, and reusing products before throwing them out, are the best methods to decrease the amount of waste.
Secondly
, recycling plays an important role in order to solve environmental problems if we take it seriously.
For example
,
people
 should refrain from throwing recyclable items into normal disposal bins and ensure they divide their rubbish and put them into separate boxes. In conclusion, providing a renewable energy supply and putting legal limits on actions that pose an
environmental
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hazard
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hazards
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 are the ways that the
government
 can effectively improve the situation. From my perspective,
people
 should play their part by changing their lifestyle from purchasing habits to disposing of their trash.I
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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