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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.
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The bar chart illustrates how much money was spent on six products in
Britain
 ,France ,Italy and
Germany
.
Overall
Britain
 consumed
larger
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a larger
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 amount
in
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of
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 all the goods considered compared to
other
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the other
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 three countries
however
Germany
 used the least cash. It is observed that,
in
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on
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 photographic films,
CD's
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CDs
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 and toys, France spent more than Italy
whereas
 on
other
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the other
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 three goods considered the expenditure is vice versa. In all cases,
Britain
 shows a significant difference in the money spent with other countries but in Tennis bats,
cash
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the cash
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 used by both
Britain
 and Italy is almost
same
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the same
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. Italy's expenses on all the items are approximately from 150 to 155. In France, the capital on Tennis equipment is the least and on movies is the greatest and In
Germany
 and
finally
 in
Germany
 the finances
on
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for
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 the pictures, perfumes and Tennis are
same
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the same
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 and the highest,
on the other hand
 on toys and
CD's
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CDs
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 are equal and the lowest.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words britain, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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