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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#year #school #university
It is certainly true that these days, students choose to take a long break of one
year
 before commencing their university education.
However
, not all the effects of
this
 phenomenon have been positive,
although
 there are certainly some advantages. There are several drawbacks
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 trend of gap
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 followed by students. A common criticism is that they may lag behind in their studies.
This
 is because
,
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 discontinuation of study
routine
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 might break their habit of keeping in touch with updated and authentic information related to their subjects. The other negative aspect can be their
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inclination towards the habit of earning money. When they keep themselves more engaged in jobs, it can change their mindset of continuing education.
Thus
, they might drop the idea of continuing their
further
 studies. In spite of these negative effects,
however
, having a
year
 off has brought important benefits as well. One
such
 advantage is that they would get some relaxation from their hectic schedule. During their free
time
, they could find more
time
 to perform their
favorite
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 leisure activities
Therefore
, they could feel refreshed, which may give them
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 to continue their
further
 education. Another positive effect is that they could get sufficient
time
 to research
further
 in detail about better study options of their areas of interest
such
 as collecting information on application processes of well-known universities like Melbourne University and many more.
Consequently
, all
this
 would widen the scope of their knowledge. In conclusion,
while
 there are some obvious drawbacks of having a gap
year
 between school and commencing university, the leverage of enjoying some leisure
time
 and utilizing it for
further
 research of study options brought us many benefits at the same
time
.
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