Some people opine that cinema will eventually lose its appeal to mass people and very few people will go to cinema halls. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

Some
individuals
opine that
cinema
significantly lose its attraction to myriad
people
in the future, and
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diminitive
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diminutive
quantity of
individuals
will go to
cinema
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in person. From my perspective, I totally disagree
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categorical view. I opine that
individuals
who are willing to watch
movies
in
cinemas
will not be declined significantly. There are obvious and sufficient reasons indicating advantages relating
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movies
in
cinema
halls. These valid reasons can significantly against opinions from some
individuals
who opine
cinema
will eventually lose its appeal to mass
people
.
Firstly
,
cinemas
usually play new
movies
to make money and get profits. The core reason is that new proficient
movies
and products significantly
attact
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attract
the audience's attention so that
audience
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are
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willing to pay for it.
Thus
, there is no doubt that
cinemas
can
get
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profits from playing new
movies
.
Secondly
, new
movies
are usually protected by laws in knowledge and creativity perspectives.
Thus
, a series of new attractive
movies
could only played in
cinemas
with authorities, which have been provided by
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government and the
movie
producer.
Lastly
,
cinema
halls can
purvey
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better conditions for playing
movies
and these conditions cannot be achieved in personal
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,
such
as surrounding sounds,
quality
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and quality
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of view.
On the other hand
, there
are
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sufficient evidence suggesting significant disadvantages
about
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not watching
movies
in
cinemas
. The main reason is if we are willing to watch a new
movie
which
attract
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us a lot, we only will watch
this
movie
in an authorized
cinema
because we usually cannot get and watch the fake
movie
from
website
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. Meanwhile, with development of laws and protections for creative and
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movies
,
it
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could contribute to prohibiting
playing
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fake
movie
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movies
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and precluding these sorts of fake
movies
'
website
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. In
couclusion
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conclusion
, the opinion which indicates
cinema
will eventually lose its appeal to mass
people
and very few
people
will go to
cinema
halls is not
significant
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correct.
Besides
,
this
kind of view is obviously categorical. New
movies
' playing procedures will be more formal with the development of protections related to innovations and new products. The authorized
cinema
hall must make profits in general through playing new and qualified
movies
and their affiliated products.
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