Some people support the idea of imposing taxes on fossil fuels (oil, coil and gas) in order to reduce energy consumption. Other people disagree with this approach. Consider the debate and its arguments, and come to your own conclusion.

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It is known that

society

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is divided into two paradoxical attitudes.

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some people believe that imposing

taxes

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on fossil fuels is not necessary, I agree with those who think that

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consequence must be applied

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due

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apply

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to reduce energy consumption. I'm going to discuss deeply

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topic

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my essay below. On the one hand,

it is clear that

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by imposing

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on oil,

coil

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coal

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and

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gas the consumers of

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this

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fossil fuels are gonna decrease rapidly, and

consequently

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the energy consumption will. In my

opinion

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this

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is the right way authorities should act, with the aim of avoiding many issues that characterise our

society

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nowadays.

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, the use of fossil fuels increases the issue of climate change, which we are desperately trying to solve.

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, by affecting the climate it will

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affect the

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and other correlated aspects,

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as global health, and so on...

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, not everyone has the economic possibility to look for other sustainable options,

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, for what concern my experience, they disagree with the thesis I've just exposed in the previous paragraph. In

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case

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applying

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can be terribly harmful for their economic situation. One possible solution should be

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taxes

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to enterprises, that are not sustainable, or to the people who have a big availability in terms of money, and keep using gas

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of electricity.

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, I represent the part of

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who

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agree

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that

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should be applied and I think that many solutions can be found in order to solve

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problem.

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