Some people support the idea of imposing taxes on fossil fuels (oil, coil and gas) in order to reduce energy consumption. Other people disagree with this approach. Consider the debate and its arguments, and come to your own conclusion.

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It is known that

society

is divided into two paradoxical attitudes.

While

some people believe that imposing

taxes

on fossil fuels is not necessary, I agree with those who think that

this

consequence must be applied

due

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apply

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to reduce energy consumption. I'm going to discuss deeply

this

topic

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my essay below. On the one hand,

it is clear that

by imposing

taxes

on oil,

coil

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coal

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and

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gas the consumers of

this

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these

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fossil fuels are gonna decrease rapidly, and

consequently

the energy consumption will. In my

opinion

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this

is the right way authorities should act, with the aim of avoiding many issues that characterise our

society

nowadays.

Firstly

, the use of fossil fuels increases the issue of climate change, which we are desperately trying to solve.

Secondly

, by affecting the climate it will

also

affect the

society

and other correlated aspects,

such

as global health, and so on...

On the other hand

, not everyone has the economic possibility to look for other sustainable options,

hence

, for what concern my experience, they disagree with the thesis I've just exposed in the previous paragraph. In

this

case

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applying

taxes

can be terribly harmful for their economic situation. One possible solution should be

apply

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to apply

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taxes

to enterprises, that are not sustainable, or to the people who have a big availability in terms of money, and keep using gas

instead

of electricity.

To conclude

, I represent the part of

society

who

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that

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agree

Correct subject-verb agreement

agrees

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that

taxes

should be applied and I think that many solutions can be found in order to solve

this

problem.

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