the diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.

the diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.
The diagram shows the procession of recycling
plastic
bottles
.
Overall
, there are 9 steps in recycling, starting with people throwing recyclable
plastic
into
recycle
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recycled
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waste
container
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containers
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and ending with products which were made
by
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from
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raw materials.
Firstly
,
plastic
products after being used will
be throw
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be thrown
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into a recycle trash bin and will be collected by trucks.
after
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After
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being added, these
plastic
bottles
will be transported to recycling before being sorted manually.
Then
, these
plastic
bottles
will be compressed into blocks before being crushed and
wash
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washed
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.
Secondly
, once
complete
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apply
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all five steps above, the
plastic
pieces will
turn
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be turned
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into
plastic
pellets by a special machine. After that, the pellets will be heated and shaped to become raw materials.
These raw material
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This raw material
These raw materials
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will be
transfer
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transferred
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to
factory
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the factory
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for particular uses
such
as
:
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apply
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producing
recycle
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recycled
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bottles
, clothes,
pencil
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pencils
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,
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and bag
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bag
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bags
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... and continue the
recycle
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recycling
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process after being used.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, bottles with synonyms.
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  • recycling
  • mitigate
  • environmental impact
  • landfills
  • conservation
  • sorted
  • residual waste
  • adhesives
  • shredded
  • pellets
  • manufacturing
  • ecological
  • economical
  • sustainable
  • automation
  • raw material
  • life cycle
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