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Due to the low cost of flights, many people are choosing to holiday abroad rather than have holidays in their own country. What are the advantages and disadvantages to this.

#cost #flights #people #holiday #holidays #country
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It has been observed that
people
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 prefer to travel internationally rather than to explore their domestic
country
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 because of the
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 flights. I believe that embracing the world tour can have
the
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 profound effect
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 one's life and its advantages
outweights
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outweighs
outweigh
 the
diaadavantages
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disadvantages
. On the one hand,
chosing
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choosing
the
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 foreign
country
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 for the vacation holds some limitations.
People
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 may face
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 barrier and find it difficult to communicate to approach
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the
destignated
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designated
 place.
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,most of the countries
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 the metro stations and the names are written in their mother language.
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,
people
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 have
a
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very limited food options and they have to restrict themselves to local
cusine
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cuisine
 which can be frustrating
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at
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 the end. On
other
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the other
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 hand, spending precious time in another
country
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 gives you
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 insight
of
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 the
country
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.
People
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 not only have a prestigious chance to learn
new
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 language but they
also
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 seek knowledge of their respective
culture
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cultures
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. To cite an example, if
people
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 get to know how the
country
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 fellows take care of their physical health by joining dance classes and aerobics, it would be
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 impactful source of effect on other's individual life. In
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conclusion,
i
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 believe despite
of
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the fact travelling to
new
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country
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 can have some repercussions, acknowledging the different atmosphere not only
ameliorate
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 the knowledge but
also
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boost
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 confidence to survive in
new
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a new
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 place.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural Exposure
  • Global Perspectives
  • Economic Benefits
  • Hospitality Industries
  • Personal Growth
  • Displacement
  • Environmental Degradation
  • Cultural Homogenization
  • Economic Dependence
  • Fluctuations
  • Global Travel Trends
  • Tourist Spending
  • Immerse
  • Adaptability
  • Globalized Tourist Preferences
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