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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or diagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is often believed by some certain individuals that printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or books are not necessary anymore,
while
other
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others
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 opine that
loosing
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 the behaviour of "touching"
paper
 can have big consequences on our society. I'm going to discuss deeply
this
 topic in my essay below. On the one hand, for what concern my opinion, time has changed and evolution is going inevitably through our lives. Some years ago we only could read a book by buying it at the
book store
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 or by renting it at the library, but either
way
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 we couldn'
t
 choose: it was printed on
paper
. Nowadays we are able to experience digitally many things that some years ago we couldn'
t
 even imagine.
Firstly
, the
kindle
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 device was launched,
then
 the newspaper started to upload news online, and
finally
 now we are able to read an entire book on our iPad or even
listen
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 an
audio-book
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audio book
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 just by downloading an app.
In addition
 to all of
this
, it is inevitable that in the future printing books or
newspaper
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newspapers
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 won'
t
 be a thing anymore, and
this
 won'
t
 affect negatively our generation, but elderly people
who
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will have big issues with their
life-style
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lifestyle
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 routine.
On the other hand
, not only older generations
,
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 but
bookstores
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also bookstores
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, libraries and many other shops
who
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that
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 sell
this products
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this product
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 will
get
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 obsolete.
Consequently
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this
 will cause a big lack of labour, and a crisis in the "
paper
/print sector" that must be solved in
a
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one
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 way or another.
To conclude
, I agree that in the future digitalised versions will be more common than printed ones, but I
also
 think that we must try to not avoid
the
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paper
 at all.
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