The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
The line chart displays the average fluctuation regarding the costs of
Copper
, Nickel, and Zinc per month.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
price
of Nickel experienced the greatest decline during the period,
while
Copper
had the least change in its
price
.
To begin
with, in January, the cost of
Copper
changed by 6% compared with the preceding month which was more than the other two metals.
However
, its
percentage
decreased to only 1% in March and remained the same for the following month. Yet, the changes regarding its
percentage
fell dramatically to -3% by June.
Then
, it rose to -1% in July and stayed steady for 3 months.
Moreover
, after a slight fall, it rose significantly from -2% to 1% by November. Concerning other items, Zink and
Copper
accounted for almost the same
percentage
in January, at 1% and 2% respectively.
Although
the
price
of Zinc had an upward trend at the beginning, and
Copper
’s cost had a downward one, they became equal in June, at about -1%. Afterwards,
Copper
’s
price
inclined to 1% for the three next months, whilst Zink’s
percentage
was just below 0%.
Finally
, they were quite similar
at the end
of the period, at roughly 2%.
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  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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