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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.
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The bar chart compares five different
countries
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 in terms of the
number
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 of
magazines
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 sold per individual in two years 2000 and 2010, with projections for 2020.
It is clear that
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while
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 the
number
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 of
magazines
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 sold in
country
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 D increases, the opposite is true for the other
countries
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.
Additionally
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, the figure for
country
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B
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 is the largest, as opposed to the lowest figure which can be seen in
country
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 E. In 2000, a resident in
country
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B
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 sold nearly 50
magazines
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,
while
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 just under 50 units and 40 units were sold by an individual in
countries
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 A and C respectively.
In contrast
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, there were nearly 20
magazines
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 sold by
country
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 D, compared to only approximately 6 by
country
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 E. In 2010, the quantities of
magazines
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 sold in
countries
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 A,
B
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 and C fell slightly,
whereas
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 the other
countries
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 saw the opposite trends in their figures. In 2020, it is predicted that the
number
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 of
magazines
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 sold in
Country
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B
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,
Country
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 C and
Country
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 E decrease minimally by around 1 each,
while
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 that of
Country
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 D will rise by a similar
number
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. Meanwhile, there was a considerable fall to under 40 in the figure for
country
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 A.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, number, magazines, country, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Increases
  • Decreases
  • Comparison
  • Significant
  • Projected
  • Sales
  • Economy
  • Digital Media
  • Impact
  • Cultural Factors
  • Analysis
  • Future Trends
  • Market Conditions
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