The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates how
sugar
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is manufactured from
sugar
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cane.
Overall
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, it is a linear process consisting of four main stages: farming, crushing, separating and drying.
The first step is
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to grow
sugar
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cane and it takes about 12 to 18 months for it to mature. After it has fully grown, it is harvested either manually or mechanically. The manual method involves farmers removing the leaves first and
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chopping the canes,
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the mechanized method uses machines to cut the canes directly. The harvested canes are
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crushed in a mill to extract the juice, which is later purified using a limestone filter.
Next,
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the purified juice is boiled in an evaporator to remove water, which concentrates it into a syrup. The syrup is
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poured into a centrifuge where it is spun at high speed to separate the
sugar
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crystals.
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, the crystals are dried and cooled and the end product is
sugar
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Harvesting
  • Transporting
  • Processing plant
  • Washing
  • Crushing
  • Boiling
  • Concentration
  • Purification
  • Crystallization
  • Cooling process
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
  • Sustainability
  • Efficiency
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