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In the future more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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trip
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 to own
country
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 would be more
people
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's choice
instead
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 of travelling to other
countries
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 in future. In point of my view, it will depend on their situation and conditions that will impact their decision. Actually, having a
trip
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 to a familiar
place
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such
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 as my own
country
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 will be more comfortable than other places, that know its language and
culture
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 and
also
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 its rules would be more difficult. On the one hand, if
people
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 tend to travel in their own
country
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, certainly they could prevent facing more problems,
such
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 as finding a suitable
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 to accommodation. even though they can stay for some time at their family home or
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, the hotel where they will have the best relationships with a reception to acquire more information about new places, that are unfamiliar to them in the common language. I think, the
trip
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 to own
country
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 has more advantages for
people
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, that they can alter in their choices of
place
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 for travelling.
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, perhaps to repetition
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 for some
people
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 would be boring, because of their diversity, especially in acquiring more experience about travelling to a new
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 with a new language and
culture
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 or maybe new rules, that it will be so exciting for them.
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, the
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 to a variety of
countries
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 has raised
people
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's awareness about
culture
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 that is not familiar to them. The tradition related to the
culture
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 of
countries
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 is a complicated view, that has roots in their ancient.
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, it is an emphasised part of its
culture
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 that stimulates tourists. I think, it can be a strong factor in
people
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's choice on their trips for going to other
countries
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 , It will be so pleasant for someone. In conclusion, choices have affected in majority of our happiness in our enjoyable
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, which one
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 is, a foreign
country
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 or our own
country
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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