The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The given line chart provides information on the elderly population in percentages (People aged 65 and over) in three particular areas: the USA, Sweden and
Japan
in the span of one century from 1940 to 2040.
Overall
, the data depicts an upward trend in those three countries. At the beginning of the period, the USA had the largest population followed by Sweden and
Japan
.
However
,
Japan
replaced that place
at the end
of the period, becoming the most dominant proportion
according to
prediction. In 1940, around 9% elderly population
lived
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in the USA and
this
gradually increased year by year reaching its peak at 15% in 1980 before decreasing slightly to approximately 14% in 2020.
However
, the chart predicts that a sudden increase will happen at about 23% in 2040.
In contrast
, Sweden experienced a gradual ascend from less than 6% to 25% in 1940 and 2040, respectively.
In addition
, between 1980 and 2000,
this
category overlapped the USA’s proportion, making it the most dominant before
Japan
exceeded it in 2040.
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