Should the government put money into art exhibitions and make them public? Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays there has been ongoing debate on spending
money
on arts and public service. The group of people
believe that the government should invest money
on
public service Change preposition
in
while
other
argue that the Fix the agreement mistake
others
authority
should spend more Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
money
in
Change preposition
on
art
section. No doubt public service plays a pivotal role however
i
believe Change the capitalization
I
art
is equally important for society hence
the government should put money
for art
exhibition
. Fix the agreement mistake
exhibitions
This
essay will further
elaborate my views.
To commence with, art
such
as music , theater
and paintings are really important as they represent our culture. Change the spelling
theatre
Art
is plays
a vital role in cultural enrichment Change the verb form
plays
as well as
it
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in
preserves
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preserving
nation's
cultural heritage. In ancient Correct article usage
the nation's
time
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times
people
used art
as a way of communication and record
part of their Wrong verb form
recording
life
. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
For
example
they drew pictures on cabes and mountains about how they hunted and what problems they faced in Add a comma
,example
process
. Add an article
the process
In addition
, art
creates tourism for the country and eventually
it Add a comma
,eventually
boost
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boosts
country's
economy. Correct article usage
the country's
For instance
, there is famous
painting Correct article usage
a famous
galary
in Correct your spelling
gallery
salary
india
where Change the capitalization
India
people
come from different country to see the paintings which eventually creates money
and boost economy
.Analysing and explaining Add an article
the economy
further
, art
is vital for education purpose
as well. As student learn more about their history and various artistic Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
movement
. Fix the agreement mistake
movements
Furthermore
, it pursue
as a hobby as it helps in intellectual development Change the verb form
pursues
as well as
to earn side income part time
. Add a hyphen
part-time
Moreover
it helps Add a comma
,Moreover
people
in
concentrate and reduce stress Change preposition
to
level
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levels
too
.
On the other side , Rephrase
apply
people
believe that there are more pressing concern
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concerns
such
as healthcare , education and so on. It is true that medical
system needs more funding Correct article usage
the medical
tha
Correct your spelling
than
art
as one's life is depend
on doctors and medicine. To clear that , one can live without amusement but proper treatment for their family members or themselves.
To summarise, by agglomerating all the points aforementioned above one can say that definately other public services are important to Change the verb form
depends
public
and the government Correct article usage
the public
such
as healthcare and education however
i
believe that Change the capitalization
I
art
is also
a crucial part of society therefore
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the goverment
goverment
should equally spend Correct your spelling
government
money
on art
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