The bar chart below shows number or seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits from 2006 to 2018

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compares

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compair

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compares

the three aquatic animal

population

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Sea,

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, and

Dolphins

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in Gormez straits between 2006 to 2018

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, in the Gormez Straits community

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sea

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increased with some mild fluctuation

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year. As per the bar chart, in the year

2006

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the highest population

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up to 42 but, in 2010

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slightly decreased and remained

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whales and

dolphins

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number slightly grew

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to 25

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2006 to 2010 and

dolphins

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to 22. In the eight years

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dolphins

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population dramatically grew in the year 2014 to 2018 it

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35 to 52 and

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followed

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37 to 44.

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, all these years whales had

steady

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change

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in 2014 to 2018 only 6 whales number increased

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The bar chart below shows number or seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits from 2006 to 2018

in the pAST PEOPLE USED TO LOOK FOR MANY DIFFERENCE FROM THEIR HOME COUNTRY. NOWADAYS CITIES THROUGHOUT THE WORLD ARE BECOMING MORE AN DMORE SIMILAR.WHAT ARE THE REASON. dO THEA ADVENTAGES OUTWEIGHT DISADVENTAGES

in some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to make vehicle drivers to take a test every year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that competition at work, at school, and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.