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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Nowadays, all over the world, the topic of visiting
places
 where
conditions
 are difficult is omnipresent.
While
 some people think the advantages for
tourists
 to travel to these
places
 exist, other people think there are disadvantages for
tourists
 to visit these
places
. From my point of view, I think the first perspective is the most persuasive for the reasons discussed below. On the one hand, as long as the benefits for
tourists
 who travel in
this
 place with difficult
conditions
is
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are
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 concerned,
firstly
, to a large extent, especially in modern times, no matter where in the world you live, when you travel under difficult
conditions
, you might surpass yourself physically and mentally
due to
 the
fact
 that you challenge your mind leading to being stronger.
In addition
, and most importantly for me, you can discover the authenticity of
places
due to
 the
fact
 that most
tourists
 do not want to go, resulting in being free and stressless.
On the other hand
, there are disadvantages for
tourists
 who visit
this
 kind of place. First and foremost, by and large, you have difficult weather
conditions
, leading to living under extremely hot or cold temperatures,
furthermore
,
for example
, in the desert, it is difficult to find suitable water for drinking.
In addition
, at least to some degree, you cannot find
emergencys
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emergency
emergencies
due to
 the
fact
 that the
places
 are isolated, owing to the
fact
 that it can be dangerous and potentially fatal if something
happened
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happens
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. In conclusion,
while
 some people think the benefits for
tourists
 to visit
places
 where
conditions
 are difficult
exist
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, others hold a different opinion.
However
, In my opinion, I think the first perspective, to some extent, is the most persuasive for the above-mentioned reasons.
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