Some people think that sports prepare children for work life while others think they do not. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

A community of people believe that physical activity provides
younger
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generation with
capacity
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to pursue their future with no problem ,
whereas
, few others
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this
idea. I will debate both the concerns and give my opinion in
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essay.
Sports
play a vital role in everybody's
life
and I believe it is crucial for
younger
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the younger
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generation to be more exposed to physical activity in their day-to-day
life
.
Moreover
,
this
will enable children to be more active in their
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without feeling any physical hardships along the way.
Besides
that,
sports
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is a mode through which youngsters can destress from school work and
this
will
aslo
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also
teach them stress
mangagement
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management
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will
helpful
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for them in the upcoming days.
For instance
, when a child aims to become a Doctor in the near future and as it requires high physical dedication, the games that they have played during their school days will enable them to work physically even in late hours and walk more without feeling to rest as
this
is what
this
particular job expects from them.
On the contrary
,
sports
and other
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miscellaneous
physical activities are considered to be of no use by many parents and other individuals.
Moreover
, they think that games will make students feel physically drained in a short period of time and they will not have enough energy throughout the day to do any other school work .
In addition
to that, a
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community
of people
also
believe that the lessons that young ones learn from these competitive games can be learnt from other sources in the near future and it will enable youngsters not to concentrate on more educational fields that
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much more importance.
For example
, when a boy prefers to play for around five hours during the day without studying , it will lead to decreased scores on the exam because he feels drained and
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will not concentrate much on his studies. In conclusion, I believe ,
sports
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an essential part ,
children
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and children
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must educate themselves on how to manage and balance both education
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it . Yet, it is the individual's perspective and their choice
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what
life
lessons they want to learn.
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