Some people think that sports prepare children for work life while others think they do not. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
A community of people believe that physical activity provides
younger
generation with Correct article usage
the younger
capacity
to pursue their future with no problem ,Add an article
the capacity
whereas
, few others feel
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apply
contradicted
Wrong verb form
contradict
with
Change preposition
apply
this
idea. I will debate both the concerns and give my opinion in this
essay.
Sports
play a vital role in everybody's life
and I believe it is crucial for younger
generation to be more exposed to physical activity in their day-to-day Add an article
the younger
a younger
life
. Moreover
, this
will enable children to be more active in their life
without feeling any physical hardships along the way. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
Besides
that, sports
is a mode through which youngsters can destress from school work and Change the noun form
sport
this
will aslo
teach them stressCorrect your spelling
also
mangagement
Correct your spelling
management
that
will Correct pronoun usage
apply
helpful
for them in the upcoming days. Add a missing verb
be helpful
For instance
, when a child aims to become a Doctor in the near future and as it requires high physical dedication, the games that they have played during their school days will enable them to work physically even in late hours and walk more without feeling to rest as this
is what this
particular job expects from them.
On the contrary
, sports
and other miscalleneous
physical activities are considered to be of no use by many parents and other individuals. Correct your spelling
miscellaneous
Moreover
, they think that games will make students feel physically drained in a short period of time and they will not have enough energy throughout the day to do any other school work . In addition
to that, a commuity
of people Correct your spelling
community
also
believe that the lessons that young ones learn from these competitive games can be learnt from other sources in the near future and it will enable youngsters not to concentrate on more educational fields that has
much more importance. Change the verb form
have
For example
, when a boy prefers to play for around five hours during the day without studying , it will lead to decreased scores on the exam because he feels drained and he
will not concentrate much on his studies.
In conclusion, I believe , Correct pronoun usage
apply
sports
Correct word choice
that sports
being
an essential part , Wrong verb form
are
children
must educate themselves on how to manage and balance both education Correct word choice
and children
along
with
it . Yet, it is the individual's perspective and their choice Change preposition
apply
on
what Change preposition
of
life
lessons they want to learn.Submitted by insighttribez on
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