The chart below give the number of people employed in five types of work in a certain region in Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the number of people employed in 5 kinds of occupation, namely sales, computing, accounting, nursing, and farming in a specific area in Australia in the eight-year period from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
, during the period, the
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employment
in sales jobs maintains as
the highest figure among the Change preposition
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employment
in 5 types of work at about 180000 employees, orderly followed by the employment
in computing, accounting, nursing, and farming. The number of people employed in farming is the lowest with about 25000 employees.
In detail, during the period, there is
a slight increase in the number of employees working in sales, computing and nursing. Meanwhile, the figure of people working in accounting and farming experienced a slight decrease. Wrong verb form
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However
, the fluctuation of employment
in all kinds of jobs is not pronounced.Submitted by viethoangnguyen0611 on
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