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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Hosting worldwide sports competitions has positive consequences for the province even though some groups tend to believe that it has more negative consequences. I truly respect both points of view
therefore
 I will provide my perspective on
this
 statement. It is a fact which is undeniable that being an anchor for international contests provides lots of benefits to the agrarian. Once we officially announce the entertainer of the next contest it will attract numerous people who are interested in joining the events. The fact that many fan clubs of international sports always join these competitions , refers to potential opportunities for the anchor homey to gain more income and interest. Including the truth that we can promote our country's soft powers and tourism through these events which will have a big impact on the metropolitan and local tourism industries.
Hence
this
 can demonstrate that it has huge positive consequences for our nation.
On the contrary
, there are groups of people who think that being an owner bucolic is not a good idea. To be honest, I truly respect both perspectives
nevertheless
, I barely see any negative impacts of being the moderator. What I can only imagine which might affect the citizens is about the traffic. The majority of enormous stadiums and fields are in the capital city which always has problems with trafficking. If I am a working person who lives in the heart of the province, I barely see the ways to go to work.
This
 is one of the most negative factors that many working men are not happy with these contests. Ultimately, I still believe that being a presenter agrarian gives us many opportunities to gain more interest and income from these competitions. Once many foreigners join the event our homey's tourism industries will slowly rise.
Nonetheless
, many people have different views on
this
 event which is acceptable for me who understand what they have to encourage if our province hosts an international sports event.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • infrastructure
  • national pride
  • cultural showcase
  • inspire a generation
  • temporary boost
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainable planning
  • public funds
  • divert resources
  • tourism influx
  • job opportunities
  • sports development
  • public health
  • construction
  • strategic investment
  • global audience
  • hospitality
  • public services
  • cost-benefit analysis
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