The most important aim of science should be to improve people's live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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subject, the main goal of scientific achievements should include improvement in humankind's
life
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of our
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life
. Highly intertwined with our ever-changing world, it should include factors to help us improve our
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expectancy
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for
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genetic
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sciences
nowadays reach some absolutely stunning results, related to
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genetic mutation in infants who
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to special diseases in other stages of their
life
.
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the whole laboratory experiments, wast amount of money invested in
this
sensitive field, and
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numerous
research done in university, all resulted in
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overall
well-being of
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society.
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, these
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achievements
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into consideration globally, can result in
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of genetic-disorder diseases and ease the burden of governments. To clarify, planners normally have to dedicate
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amount of money to provide better facilities for retarded parts of society. From
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prespective
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perspective
perspectives
,
this
issue
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more importance when it is
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fact that science can cause more harm than good in some areas. Taking nuclear power as an example,
this
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acheivement
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achievement
can be used to produce clean energy
while
, at the same time highly devastating
vepons
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weapons
. these
counter-intuative
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counter-intuitive
usages, resulting from scientific experiments, have the potential to save fossil fuel sources and at the same time kill
numorous
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numerous
people in possible political contentions and wars. To restrain its negative
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consequences
, international agreements are required. In a
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nutshell
,
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level of success in science should be beneficial for people all around the world. As it can bring happiness and
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increase
standarded factors.
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, if these
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a reverse side, the result is nothing but destruction.
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