The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.
The table provides information regarding the proportion of
students
who faced a variety of educational problems in School A and School B in the years 2005 and 2015. Overall
, a larger percentage of students
in Organization A faced difficulties than students
in Organization B in both the years considered.
To begin
with, in educational institution A, there was a reduction in the percentage of students
who had issues related to spelling, listening skills, verbal expression of ideas, concentration in lessons, and following instructions in the decade. However
, the Reading ability problem which was 22% in 2005 increased to 23% during the period and it is evident that there was no progress in the student's count for handwriting issues.
It is clear that
in educational institution B, student proportion grew by 1% for the problems concerning studying ,listening and verbal expression during the time period considered. Moving further
, the same trend was seen in spelling and following instruction problems but with a greater figure increment. Additionally
, there was no change in writing and concentration skill concerns.Submitted by kavitha7797 on
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