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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 a highly sensitive subject, the main goal of scientific achievements should include improvement in humankind’s
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. I personally agree with
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 statement. Science is a broad topic including every
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 of our
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. Highly intertwined with our ever-changing world, it should include factors to help us improve our
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life
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 expectancy.
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, genetic science nowadays
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 some absolutely stunning results, related to combating genetic mutation in infants who are highly predisposed to special diseases in other stages of their
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.
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, the whole laboratory experiments,
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 of money invested in
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 sensitive field,
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 numerous
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 done in universities, resulted in
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overall
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 well-being of society.
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, these achievements, if taken
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consideration globally, can
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 in
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 of genetic-related diseases and ease the burden of governments. To clarify, planners normally have to dedicate a relatively substantial amount of money to provide better facilities for retarded people. From
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,
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 issue gains more importance when it is
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 fact that science can cause more harm than good in some cases. Taking nuclear power as a vivid example,
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 achievement can be used to produce clean energy
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, at the same time highly devastating weapons. To clarify, these counter-intuitive usages, resulting from scientific experiments, have the potential to save our fossil fuel and at the same time kill numerous people in
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 of political contention and wars.
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, to restrain its negative consequences, international agreements are required. In a nutshell, a higher level of scientific success should be beneficial for people around the world. As it can bring happiness and increase
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-related standard factors.
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, if it is used on the reverse side, the
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 is nothing but destruction
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