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The table gives information on consumer spending in five countries.

The table gives information on consumer spending in five countries.
The table depicts the data about the consumerism of different goods in five European countries (Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, Turkey) in the period 2002.
Overall
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, the most popular way of spending money was
food
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drinks
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tobacco
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.
In addition
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, Turkey was the leader in buying
such
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 items with over 30 per cent. In comparison, in
Sweden
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 people preferred to spend much less money on
food
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drinks
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tobacco
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 with just slightly over 15%, which is two times less than in Turkey. In
Ireland
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 consumers liked to buy mostly
food
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drinks
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tobacco
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 with nearly 29%, but leisure/education placed as the least interest with nearly 2.5%.
Moreover
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, leisure/education was the
last
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 priority of spending finance in all five European countries. Clothing / footwear were not as popular as
food
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drinks
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tobacco
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. In Italy people spend 9% of their money on it
while
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 in Sweden approximately less
on
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 3% (5.40% respectively).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, drinks, tobacco with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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