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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant
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The bar charts illustrate the number of graduate and postgraduate
students
 who opted for other options other than full-time
work
 after completing
the
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college in the UK in the year 2008.
Overall
,
Further
 study was the most chosen option by both
while
 only
few
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 graduates chose voluntary
work
 post completing
the
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college.
To begin
 with, after graduation, 29,665
students
 proceeded for
further
 study which is approximately twice the number of
students
 who stayed unemployed. Part-time
work
 was the second
popular
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 option among the graduates with
17,735
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a 17,735
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 figure. Only 3,500 undergraduates went for voluntary
work
. The popularity of the options stayed the same in both undergraduate and postgraduate
students
. It is evident that after
post graduation
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post-graduation
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, the number of
students
 who chose
part time
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part-time
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work
 and
further
 study was within the range of 2500 to 2800
scholar
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scholars
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. Moving
further
,1625
students
 did not get the job and only 345 postgraduates selected voluntary activities.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time work
  • graduate
  • postgraduate
  • trends
  • part-time work
  • further study
  • gap year
  • traveling
  • unemployment
  • percentages
  • proportion
  • significant differences
  • subsequent activities
  • career progression
  • academic advancement
  • job market
  • vocational training
  • data interpretation
  • employment sector
  • career-oriented steps
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