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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job .On the other hand; other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills are more important. Discuss both views and express your own opinion.

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Introduction
Some people think studying at universities is the only way to get a
high paid
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 job.
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And
 some people are of the idea that experienced employees can do the job and there is no need to have
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high level
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education
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This
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 essay will discuss both these
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 of view and argue in
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 of the prior.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand,
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 many, education is regarded as a major issue and
goverments
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governments
 of the countries are supporting the students in many ways. Studying and researching can bring about many merits.
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 graduated students from
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 universities are easily accepted
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well known
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 companies.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, being experienced is an important factor and it is considered the most important factor. They think the vital key to being successful is having practical
experinces
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experience
experiences
. To them, having a
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 at
uniersity
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university
 is not a vital role.
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CEOs without a university
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 can have a famous company.
Body paragraph 3
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,in my opinion,
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while
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 the importance of
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experience
 can not be neglected.
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, students
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 have a
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 in the same field
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 their job can do much better. For
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instance
 after
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 they can take some courses to be more experienced and
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 may lead to
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success
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Conclusion
By way of conclusion, despite the fact that the importance of experiences is emphasized I am of the opinion that having
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degree
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 can be essential.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • specialized training
  • networking
  • baseline requirement
  • financial burden
  • hands-on experience
  • practical skills
  • soft skills
  • dynamic job market
  • entrepreneur
  • formal education
  • portfolio
  • hybrid approach
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