The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of transportation used to travel and go to work in a city by European citizens during a 40-year period from 1960 to 2000.
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, there were many significant changes during the period.
While
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the figure for
cars
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increased over time,
this
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number decreased for other types of transport. It can be clearly observed from the chart that nearly 40% of
travelers
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preferred to use buses in comparison with only 27% for tubes, 18% for
trains
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, and 7% for
cars
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in 1960. After 20 years,
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the percentage of people using
trains
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experienced a significant rise to reach a peak of over 25%, there was a dramatic climb to 20% in that of people commuting by car.
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, the figure for those who travelled by bus and tube witnessed a substantial drop to over 25% and over 20%, respectively. In the following twenty years,
cars
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and buses reached the same percentages as tubes and
trains
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, at approximately 23% and over 25% respectively.
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, the proportion of
cars
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peaked at roughly 40%, which was over 20% higher than that of tubes in 2000.
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,
trains
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considerably declined to over 20%,
whereas
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buses hit the lowest point of 15%.
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