Write a letter to the director of your company to recommend a group in your local community which deserves help. In your letter, you should tell: why you suggest helping this group how your company can help this group what the beneﬁts your company will in return for.

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing

this

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letter to suggest an opinion regarding helping a local community by offering jobs from your

company

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. I am living in Warrington, a group of people from Syria has

came

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come

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there and created a community. As they are new and

has

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have

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language barriers they are struggling to live in the UK. I am well aware that our

company

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is well known in terms of helping

community

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the community

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hence

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, helping them would be a great one. As our firm is opening a new outlet in Manchester it would be much appreciated if you could give them jobs, which will be a great stress relief for them in terms of

economic

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the economic

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crisis.

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of helping in their difficult situation can build

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affection towards our

company

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which will increase our

company

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's output.

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to that they can promote our

company

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through mouth publicity which will be

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added benefit for us. I expect a positive response from you. Yours Faithfully, Tom Wilson

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coherence cohesion

Keep paragraphs focused on single main ideas; this enhances readability. Here, the paragraph addressing the benefit to the company can be better divided into separate ideas.

task achievement

Revise sentences for minor grammatical errors and to improve clarity. For instance, "...a group of people from Syria has came there and..." should be "...a group of people from Syria who have come here and..."

task achievement

You provided a clear recommendation and a rationale for helping the group, which strong covers the task achievement criterion.

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Your letter has a polite and formal tone suitable for business correspondence.

coherence cohesion

The logical structure of your letter is good; each section addresses different parts of the prompt in a coherent manner.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

168 words

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Write a letter to the director of your company to recommend a group in your local community which deserves help. In your letter, you should tell: why you suggest helping this group how your company can help this group what the beneﬁts your company will in return for.

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